c1h2m3 发表于 2014-10-9 16:59   全显示 1楼
单从大大的第一章就能看出这部作品的不凡，不过可能是因为作者大大首次写武侠题材，感觉在打斗方面还略有欠缺，尤其是主人公出招总要喊一声，我觉得换成旁白不加引号可能会更好一些，还有就是主角的招式名称可以更高大上一点。
当然，这些都只是白璧微瑕，期待大大接下来更精彩的后续！
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